legend124

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原帖由 tom1314 於 2010-4-11 14:46 發表

hey dude,you should need more improve of your English language.....
and the song that's called:
don't stop make it pop - LadyGaGa



Chinglish....

4 mistakes

1. never use "language' after language like Cantonese,Italian,french,English
    that's meaningless as the nature of both words are duplicated
    make it simple,as we all know english is already an language, there's no need for us to define it again
2. need + noun/to infinitive,not a verb
    you can write "you need more improvement...." , "you need to improve..."
3. we seldom use "should need"
    better use "better need" or simply "you need improvement/should improve
4. "and the song that's called"
    two subjects in one sentence...?
    it should be "and the song is called" / "and for the song it's called"



you still need more efforts before being qualified to teach the others

[ 本帖最後由 legend124 於 2010-4-11 23:21 編輯 ]

legend124

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原帖由 derekyin 於 2010-4-12 19:41 發表


有高人

thank you