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good morning!I'M xxxxx hung form 3xx . Today,I'm going to talk about money is important.  
Money is important . We use money to buy food,we need money for heat and water, money give us power.
Even though is junk and drugs, cigarettes and beer. Also need money to get it.
You can ask the homeless people how important money is. You would get a valuable education by money.
Now to more fully answer why money is so important i would say because people like to have better things than other.
Money is necessary . If the world was perfect,it wouldn't be.
Everybody would do what they loved,ate what they wanted,did what they wanted,and everybody would be happy.
But the world,sadly,isn't perfect.
Money is the root of many problems,but without it society wouldn't function in this flawed world.
Money is important.I hate to admit it but I'd have to say that money is high up there on the important list.
Thank you.

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good morning!I'M xxxxx hung form 3xx . Today,I'm going to talk why about money is important.  
Money is so important . We use money in our daily life, just like buying food and  luxury .  (heat係熱,唔需要買) . Money give us power.
Even junk , drugs, cigarettes and beer, allso need money to get it.
You can ask the homeless people how important money is. You would get a valuable education by money.
Now to more fully answer why money is so important i would say because people like to have better things than other.
Money is necessary . If the world was perfect,it wouldn't be.
Everybody would do what they loved,ate what they wanted,did what they wanted,and everybody would be happy.
But the world, unfortunately , it isn't perfect.
Money is the root of many problems,but without it society wouldn't function in this flawed world.
Money is important.I hate to admit it but I'd have to say that money is high up there on the important list.
Thank you.

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good morning!I'M xxxxx hung form 3xx . Today,I'm going to talk about money is important.  
i agree Money is important . We need to buy food,water and somethings need in life  by money.money give us power.
Even though is junk and drugs, cigarettes and beer. Also need money to get it.
You could get a valuable education with money by asking the homeless people how important money is.

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原帖由 hung2014 於 2011-11-15 20:12 發表
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good morning!I'M xxxxx hung form 3xx . Today,I'm going to talk about money is important.  
Money is important .
We use money to buy food,we need money for heat and water, money give us power.
(There is no doubt that money can enable us to afford basic necessities)
Even though is junk and drugs, cigarettes and beer. Also need money to get it.
(is it meaningless?)
You can ask the homeless people how important money is. You would (can also)get a valuable education by money.
Now to more fully answer why money is so important i would say because people like to have better things than other.
Money is necessary . If the world was perfect,it wouldn't be.
Everybody would do what they loved,ate what they wanted,did what they wanted,and everybody would be happy.
But the world,sadly,isn't perfect.
Money is the root of many problems,but without it society wouldn't function in this flawed world.
Money is important.I hate to admit it but I'd have to say that money is high up there on the important list.
Thank you.

i just have a glance at this......- -
but.. actually you are advised to have a proofreading ..

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原帖由 REMEMBER 於 2011-11-15 21:51 發表
樓上的高手 交給你了
我先跑了.......(l o l中)

唔係高手..
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原帖由 hung2014 於 2011-11-15 20:12 發表
good morning!I'M xxxxx hung form 3xx .> Today,I'm going to talk about money is important. <呢句刪除
Money is important . We use money to buy food,>we need money for heat and water, money give us power.<唔明你想表達咩
>Even though is junk and drugs, cigarettes and beer. Also need money to get it.<除左酒,煙,藥物, JUNK係唔關事, 且例子不適當, 應舉例日常必需品吧??
You can ask the homeless<needy/poor?另外中文作文你會唔會寫: 你可以問邊個...| 整句子有問題>,  people how important money is(how important is money). You would get a valuable education by money.(盡量用MONEY做主角, Money can bring u...)
Now to more fully answer why money is so important(run on sentence) i would say because people like to have better things than other(s).
Money is necessary . If the world was perfect,it wouldn't be.
Everybody would do what they loved,ate what they wanted,did what they wanted,and everybody would be happy.唔知點改, 總之有問題
But the world,sadly,isn't perfect.
Money is the root of many problems(many kinds of problems),but without it ,society wouldn't function in this flawed world.
Money is important.I hate to admit it but I'd have to say that money is high up there on the important list.
Thank you.

唔知點改好, 試下用其他方式去表達, 好多地方係字典英文黎, 用下google搵你既adj用係個noun到多唔多用
...

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講MONEY IS IMPORTANT真係唔洗寫野...
即場發揮都得...可能你寫遍野同我作文既style唔同, 好難入手幫你改到
加上我又唔係老師http://www.paulnoll.com/Books/Clear-English/debate-05-money-pro.html

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原帖由 REMEMBER 於 2011-11-15 21:23 發表
good morning!I'M xxxxx hung form 3xx . Today,I'm going to talk why about money is important.  
Money is so important . We use money in our daily life, just like buying food and  luxury .  (heat係熱,唔 ...

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